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It seems these stifled words for you will always lack music
No matter how smooth or effortless they fall from the vine,
Not ever heard raising a single pitched note into your mind,
And thinking on what to do makes me somewhat muse sick
Knowing words with no tune is just mute say, mute poetry,
A forsaken giant no one sits under, namely the wise Poetree.
Your head is often a mass of undeveloped skull fat flapping
In the wind, and your brain, sand my pressed fingers draw in,
But no matter what messages or 'I'm telling you' premonition,
There they are, erased with every high-rising wave slapping.
Down this fretboard of lines my pen slides, burnin' them all up
By placing a lint of hope in my pocket at its heated ballpoint,
Maturing my words into loud crackling fire eating at the page,
And my lint of hope wishful to be heard now burns with rage!
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This is the song [link] by Stevie Ray Vaughn that made my mind go in every direction and
absolutely haywire when writing this, which would explain the relation to the burning via
the lines in the poem referred to as a fretboard on fire, etc. near the end of the Sonnet.

The song is called Rude Mood and my head could hardly keep up, literally.

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The rhyme scheme of this Sonnet is ABBACCDEEDFGHH.

This Sonnet is what has vexed me most over anything I have ever written
besides my In Memoriam - Mari taking three whole long years to perfect.
I really had to, how can I say . . . defy and bend the hard-cased steel of my
native tongue (English) to pull this one off. I found myself in many a pause
choked up around the cerebellum to think the words I wanted to put forth.
After maiming hours and maiming hours upon my head it is now complete.



Enjoy the read.
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*lombregrise Nov 17, 2012  Professional Writer
featured / invité [link] :sun:
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=Venry Sep 10, 2012  Student General Artist
I did enjoy. :clap: Powerful word choices.
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~VicariouSoul Sep 15, 2012  Professional Writer
That's the idea, to cram as much possible into every line and to mean something. I really appreciate it.
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=Venry Sep 16, 2012  Student General Artist
:glomp:
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~VicariouSoul Sep 16, 2012  Professional Writer
You, you broke my back! Just . . . kidding!
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=Venry Sep 19, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconhurrhurrplz:
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Mood: Joy *lombregrise Sep 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Very dense, with strong images, a technique is beyond me still. I think this is one of your best writing, but I still work on it.
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~VicariouSoul Sep 10, 2012  Professional Writer
I don't know about best as there's a lot of other ones, but it's up there I suppose. Thank You.
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*lombregrise Sep 10, 2012  Professional Writer
"one of the best" :sun: - This one, I think, is very strong. I'm training to declaim it with my french accent : you miss a great moment :rofl:
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~VicariouSoul Sep 10, 2012  Professional Writer
Sorry. I've been up all hours and have had no rest trying to finish a poem. A great moment? *Laughs* Not really, as I still appreciate your comment.
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